(Draft) Bullying – what should be done about it?
Zachary Chock
Period 2
The government should create classes and sessions to counsel and help stop bullying. With people being plagued by the individuals known as “bullies” everyday, people urge the governing system to do something about the issue, as not much is being done to fully address the issue. However, there are people who claim that the government has already done enough to resolve and help the issue. I stand on the side of the argument complaining that the government should do something about the issue, opposing the side saying the government has done enough.
The first argument complains that our government is not doing enough to address and combat the issue about bullying. Although many programs exist, such as anti bullying programs, websites, and flyers to educate about the issue and what can be done to stop the bullying, there is little action being taken by the governing system when the bully is caught and detained. In one case on October 17 2009, a teenager, Tyler Long, was bullied until he was sent over the edge, and hung himself. Strangely, the school officials failed to recognize or acknowledge any form of the bullying in process, and disturbingly, his suicide was mocked and openly made fun of in classrooms, without any action being taken to stop mockery and disrespect. The law or state did not call action at any time to intervene with the bullying, and the only action was taken when Tyler ’s parents sued the school for failure to do anything when their son was being picked on, or stopping the students from making fun of his death.
On the other side, there are the people who counteract with the idea that everything in our power has already been done to help the efforts of the anti-bullying activities. Government statistics reveal that one of three students are bullied in Middle and High schools now, affecting overall mental health, success in school, and being able to be around others with trust. The DOE has recently issued a warning to avoid neglecting bullied students, in a effort to stop suicides and deaths among gays, lesbians, and racially discriminated students in schools
Studies show that up to 57% of students have witnessed people bullying others, and 15% are absent, in the fear of being bullied, while 90% of 4th – 8th graders have been bullied in our schools. In Hawaii , one fifth of students are victims of bullying, having been at 18% in three years of 2000 through 2003.
In conclusion, I stand on the side that says there is not enough being done to prevent bullying in today’s schools. The government may be taking action and preventive measures, but there are still people who push others into mental breakdown, and to the verge of suicide, while people say that there is nothing else that can be done about the events that unfold during a bully’s rampage.
Bibliography/Sources:
- http://www.honolulumagazine.com/Honolulu-Magazine/May-2007/Bullied/
Woah Zach good stuff! Its good to see that you put a lot of percentages and even put the face of a victim in your essay. You also did a good job acknowledging the opposing side and argued against it. One thing you could have done to maybe just add some more credibility is put the name of the people who did the tests and what universities or doctors and stuff like that. Other then that great job.
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Interesting essay dude. However, your conclusion is stating that you are on the side of there not being enough done to stop bullying. Aren't you supposed to be on that side when you are arguing? This also goes for your introduction as well. For your thesis, you could take out "I stand on the side of the argument complaining that" as it is not needed (not to mention sounds weird, especially in a thesis)
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ReplyDeleteHi Zach,
ReplyDeleteAlthough your essay does contain a pro argument and an attempt at a con argument, I realized after I did my first comment (which I have deleted) that you are not addressing the thesis you had originally chosen. You are actually arguing Dallas' thesis. And, for this assignment, each team member was supposed to pick a different element of the issue to focus on.
Yours was education and your thesis, as I recorded it from our team conference, was that the government should provide classes to help stop bullying.
mrs s